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这次托福考试写作部分整体难度较难。独立写作原题复用：2021年2月家考

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总论点

北的一队探险队是否死因是罐装食物的铅中毒

阅读部分

富兰克林的水手死于铅中毒，Franklin's sailors died and were found lead poisoned in their bodies. Some people think it was because the canned food.

阅读给出三个原因：

-lead not in contact with food，铅是用于罐头表面，而食物在里面，不会受到其影响

-no other report，当时的其他船员也都会食用这种罐头，假如真的因为罐头不可能只有这一例中毒案件

-one other possible result，船上的净水系统的管道是铅做的，所以有可能是净水系统出问题了

听力部分

听力一一反驳：

-罐头工人工作非常忙，在很短时间生产很多罐头，所以会非常疲惫和粗心，导致罐头表面的铅进入食物里面

-由于铅中毒的症状并不特殊，是头疼，所以很有可能被忽视或被误解为是其它原因引发的病症。而且，即使然其他舰队没有铅中毒死亡，可能他们体内已经有很多铅了，只是没达到死亡的量罢了

-船上的净水系统是为机器提供水的，并没有用于 drinking and cooking，饮用水及做饭用的水是特殊分开储藏的，因为他们知道盐水会毁掉他们的身体，所以不可能是管道的铅进入人体

解题思路

传统四段式写作，每一段阅读内容+听力内容和细节，注意细节和同义替换

参考范文

The author of the reading claims that Franklin's sailors died and were found lead poisoned in their bodies. However, the lecturer challenges this perspective, believing that it was because the canned food.

The reading first claims that lead is used on the surface of cans, while food is inside and will not be affected. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by mentioning that canners are very busy and produce a lot of cans in a short time, so they will be very tired and careless, resulting in lead on the surface of cans entering the food.

Secondly, the writer in the reading asserts that at that time, other crew members would also eat this kind of canned food. If it was true, it could not be the only poisoning case because of the canned food. The professor in the lecture points out that because the symptoms of lead poisoning are not special, so it is likely to be ignored or misunderstood as a disease caused by other reasons. Moreover, even though other fleets did not die of lead poisoning, they may already have a lot of lead in their bodies, but they just didn't reach the amount of death.

Thirdly, the reading passage conceives that they have a water purification system. All the water is clean, so it can't be caused by food. The listening, by contrast, says that the water purification system on board provides water for the machine and is not used for drinking and cooking. Drinking water and cooking water are specially stored separately because they know that salt water will destroy their bodies, so it is impossible for lead from pipes to enter the human body.

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考题回忆

Do you agree or disagree with the statement:

It is better for older people to take risks and explore new things than younger people .

重复2018/2/4

解题思路

比较类题型： 选择一方:

要注意对比论证的使用：A（老年人）>B(年轻人)

参考范文

范文：

Conventional wisdom generally believes that it is easier for young people to be exposed to innovative ideas and new concepts so that they can catch up with the current news and most up to date information. Elders, on the other hand, are supposed to relax and enjoy their retirement to the fullest extent. However, I have a totally different perspective on this issue and tend to believe that older people need to explore new things more than young people.

Admittedly, young people are generally more healthy and energetic than the elders, hence it is more likely for them to come up with new ideas and perspectives than elders. Indeed, as we can tell that professionals in different fields like scientists, business men, lawyers tend to have be more competitive and sharp when they are at a young age, actually, research shows that the average age of billionaires is well below 40. Nonetheless, it is more important for elders to stay touch with the latest trend and continue their lifelong learning.

First and foremost, continued learning makes it possible for elders to stay in touch with the currents and build a deeper connection with younger family members. The only thing that doesn't change in today's world is change itself, new electronic gadgets, innovative treatment to cure incurable diseases, creative business ideas and approaches that are unthinkable in the past, you name it. It can be disastrous if elders stop being an active learner and retreat to the primitive mindset. For instance, young people are fond of new electronic devices like iPad, iPhone and stuff, and they use these gadgets to stay in touch with their peers and families. If a grandpa has not even heard of twitter or Instagram, it will be impossible for the two generations to stay connected.

Additionally, a host of research done by a world famous psychiatrist show that elders who give up learning and have no access to new ideas tend to suffer from dementia and Alzheimer. On the other hand, other search shows that elders who keep learning will stay in touch with the world and are healthier both physically and mentally. Based on my personal experience, I find elders around who are willing to learn and embrace new things are less dependent on their families and tend to be better connected with their children and grandchildren. Plus, they are more creative and productive when they access their frontal lobe and avoid their primitive mindset. Staying active and keeping exploring new things make it possible for seniors to seek for the true meaning and value of life, which in turn will inspire and motivate younger generation to take risks and accept challenges in life.

In a nutshell, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is better for elders to take risks and explore in new endeavors than the younger generations since it helps elders reconnect with their families and makes them more independent, productive and inspirational.